100 Word Challenge – …so, as I looked over the edge, I saw…

The wind howled. I struggled to keep my umbrella under control as the night’s freezing wind tried to steal it right from my grasp. CRASH!  The thunder echoed, making me jump slightly. I stopped, and stared at the dark grey clouds, occasionally being illuminated by brightly coloured lightning. My gaze fixed on the lookout about 20 metres away from me. I slowly and carefully crept up to it, shivering. I crept up to the soaking iron railing. I had to see why nobody came here. I had to. So, as I looked over the edge, I saw something, something, unexplainable.

2 thoughts on “100 Word Challenge – …so, as I looked over the edge, I saw…

  1. I really liked that 100 word challenge. One thing I would say is that you use crept twice. It says ” I slowly and carefully crept up to it, shivering. I crept up to the soaking iron railing.” I suggest using a synonym like tiptoed, slid, or wandered. Other than that, I thought it was AMAZING, and deserved to be on showcase ( in CAPS ^0^ )

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